Fractured Persona

Richard Fornek wakes up in a hospital after a car accident a completely different person.  Literally.  His mind is still his own, but he is in the body of Daniel Curtis, who was hospitalized after his wife attacked him.  Richard is in a different city (actually an entirely different state), has a different wife, different friends, a different family, and a different body and life.  He realizes that he must learn to live this new life, but runs into several problems along the way.

Daniel Curtis is suspected of murdering a woman with whom he was having an affair.  Only, Daniel is Richard, so he must piece together who Daniel really was, and where he was at the time of the murder.  What he learns is that Daniel’s life was coming apart at the seams, and he must figure out how to put it all back together so he can live his life- as a free man.  It is not an easy task, as Richard really has no idea who can be trusted, or if Daniel may have actually been the murderer.  Richard must also find out what happened to his body, and if this madness can all be righted.

There are a few times while reading that the pace lagged with just a little bit too much detail that was not relevant in the end, but the story being told outweighed those times.  While the ending may leave the reader staring at the book, hoping it may change, it quickly becomes apparent that it could end no other way.  There is no way everyone gets a happy ending, so those that can should take it.

Fractured Persona is a story of losing sight of who you are, learning through someone else’s eyes, and putting a life back together from the pieces that you find.  There are times when life seems as though it is living itself, and Krebs cleverly cloaks the idea of feeling like you are not yourself in a metaphor of switching bodies.  It is also a story of understanding that you never really know anyone else until you have lived in their shoes- an opportunity that is nearly impossible.

Krebs delivers a story that is part mystery, part fantasy, and entirely introspection.  Although the idea of switching bodies has been done before, there is something that is just enough different that will draw one in until the end.  He is able to delve into a world of despair, loss, and confusion, and bring the reader out on the other side with a feeling of hope, gain, and discovery.  Fractured Persona offers a different look into the lives of others, and will keep the reader turning the pages wanting more.

The Void
By Bryan Healey
Copyright © 2012
Createspace
ISBN: 978-1463507886
148 pages
$6.99 at Amazon.com
$3.99 Kindle

Imagine yourself in a coma, dead and unconscious to everyone around you for the past six years, and then suddenly able to hear and think. But that’s all. No sense of smell or sight or touch.
 
   Beyond what is given me by those around me, I can experience nothing but what I am able to cobble together using old memories and my old knowledge and my old beliefs and ideals, and the product always lacks the pull of the sonorous echo of Jenny’s ever melodious words, drifting into my ears like rose petals against a stiff breeze. Her voice makes me see color, see music, to see a lively painting, rolling fields of yellow and green cast across a blue, formless sky; she reminds me that there is a world, and at least part of it still cares that I am here.

This is The Void, a world narrated by Max Aaron in this short novel by Bryan Healey. In it, Max’s narrative alternates between processing his current surroundings and reflecting back to major events in his past, with a couple of dreams thrown in, in a kind of stream of consciousness style. There are no line or chapter breaks. The dominance of single-sentence paragraphs makes for a quick pace.

The transitions between past and present come unexpectedly and are key to making the experiences related by such a passive protagonist interesting for a reader. A certain word or phrase from a visitor launches Max’s mind to his past, whether to his time in the military, meeting his wife, Jenny, watching the birth of his son, or the purchase of the car that son now wants.

   I remember buying that car; it was a beautiful, sunny Saturday, driving to the address that I found in the newspaper, boasting a cheap sports car for sale.
   I needed a new car.
   “Good afternoon!” I smile at the man.
   “Howdy!”
   “I hear you have a car for sale?”
   “Indeed, I do,” he beams and motions for me to follow him into his garage. Briefly, I consider that maybe he is going to kill me, and I wonder if I would be able to defend myself…
   But then his garage door opens, and before me is the most gorgeous hunk of metal and leather that I have ever seen, glistening with the little sunlight suddenly available from the outside opening.
   It was black, convertible.
   It smelled magnificent.
   I would have paid him whatever he asked…
   “He always loved that car.”
   I’m glad he’ll have something from me…

What solitary sadness Max must feel hearing people speaking about him. Their obliviousness of his limited consciousness makes them say things in his presence they wouldn’t otherwise. It works well as a device because it’s not distracting; instead, one wonders how he can endure the impact of their words alone. This is most distressing when his wife and son make the decision to pull his feeding tube to let him die. But more powerful was the one-way interaction between Max and a night nurse, Sarah, whose own tragic circumstances affect Max even more deeply, it seemed.

It’s not all so gloomy and there are light moments. A bit of suspense too. Several memories of reveal incidents of danger or peril. With each, you wonder, was this the event that put him in the coma? The answer does come but for me it was rather uninspired, like the rest of his previous life, which was rather unoriginal in dramatic terms. Perhaps that was on purpose to ensure his current circumstanes take precedence.

The big moral issue of the right to ‘pull the plug’ in such a situation is, curiously, not explored. Perhaps by accepting the possibility of Max’s ‘Void’ an argument could be constructed against mercy killing on the basis of his consciousness. The mercy, then, would be for the family as Max would be content continuing to live indefinitely within his memories and hearing. But he accepts their decision gracefully; what choice does he have? Perhaps there could have been an outsider fighting to keep Max alive. This lack of actual conflict creates another void, a literary one.

But I can appreciate why this route wasn’t taken. It would have made for a far different story, one that would have struggled to sustain the style, and risked becoming too conventional. As it is, The Void is an interesting and creative piece. But because of its narrow scope and shortness, I’d hesitate to call it a novel.

I read this from an ARC epub file, which contained proofing errors and inconsistent line spacing; i.e. the excerpt above was double spaced in the book while other sections were single-spaced. I assume these issues will be resolved by the time this review is posted and The Void is generally available.

Roppongi
By Nick Vasey
Createspace
Copyright © 2012
364 pages
$25.00 at Amazon.com
$9.99 Kindle

Peripatetic Australian Zack Morrissey is a chick magnet and all round likeable guy in 1998, back when international travel wasn’t so complicated. He’s crewing on a tourist boat in Israel, partying it up and having a good time, but not a wild time; also he’s not making as much money as he wants. Hence the compelling need to return to a notorious district of Tokyo called—and vividly depicted in Nick Vasey’s debut novel—Roppongi.

Why Roppongi? In short, it is:

. . . a non-stop party-shop, a crazy rollercoaster-ride of drugs, drinking, partying and gorgeous women. Money flowed freely from a slashed, seemingly limitless financial aorta, and it was actually his job to make every night the biggest party he could. Since everyone was hell-bent on getting as fucked-up as they could as often as they could, his job was perhaps better defined as conductor to this hedonistic orchestra. Lawyers, bankers, brokers, wankers . . . it really didn’t matter. They’d all come to his bar thirsting for a wild time. And how he’d delighted them! Under his expert helmsmanship, Bongoes had become legendary for excess.

That excess, and a difficult breakup, had driven Zack out two years before. Now Zack is ready to explore and exploit its possibilities again. His adventures begin promisingly on the flight to Tokyo where Zack charms a married flight attendant for a tryst in Roppongi. From there, it’s a wild ride of sex, drugs, and violence as Zack re-integrates himself into Tokyo’s underworld. Through mostly Zack’s observations, the inanimate but highly animated character of Roppongi emerges, rising to the level of some mythical beast that rewards those who embrace its culture—particularly the outsiders, the ‘gaijin’—with a surrealistic party atmosphere always on the go. Zack is ideally suited for this environment, and vice (pun intended) versa. For the reader he’s a wonderful guide and for the friends who fatefully join him there, a one-man welcome committee.

It doesn’t take long for Zack to re-establish his place as a drug conduit and start making lots of money, but it does take some time before a concrete plot emerges. This occurs when Zack’s drug activities—and his  general popularity and influence in Roppongi—draws the enmity of Max, an ambitious Nigerian trying to penetrate Tokyo’s criminal element. Max is a nasty, violent character who comes to epitomize the menace of Roppongi. People begin to die as Max steps up his efforts to infiltrate a Tokyo gang. Zack sees what’s going on but finds himself powerless to do much about it, especially after he falls in true love with a Canadian girl, whom he must protect. But protect from what? Max? Roppongi? Himself?

Taken as a travelogue, Roppongi works very well. The descriptions of the area, and Japanese culture in general from an ex-pat’s point of view, are well crafted with fluid, energetic prose:

In a few short steps they voyaged to a parallel dimension. A world of darkness and rising mists, of flashing strobes mixed with a sea of UV-enhanced psychedelic colour. Insinuating itself throughout this fantastic dreamscape was the relentless pumping energy coming from the speakers. The energy was absorbed, mutated, and subsequently reflected in exultation by the seething mass of super-charged people crowding the dance-floor.

As a novel, though, the book did not succeed as well. The plot was not as exciting as the environment—which could be taken as a compliment to the handling of the setting—and took too long to unfold for my taste.

Part of that is due to overwriting in parts, such as the long setup for the scene in the morgue. The over-reliance on adverbs occasionally led into purple prose, as did a tendency to favour decorative verbs over “said” in speaker attributions. Much of the dialogue could have been pared down. It all made the book seem longer than it needed to be, a common trait with self-published works.

The proofreading, on the other hand, while not perfect, is far better than most self-published books. What errors exist are inconsequential and have no negative impact on the reading.

I also had trouble relating to Zack; he isn’t my type of character. He’s an unusually lucky and talented guy who doesn’t need to invest much effort in things. It all comes easily to him, be it work, sex, accommodation, drugs. His women are universally drop dead gorgeous and he always wins at pool, unless he’s trying not to. Bad things do happen to him, or rather to the people he cares about, but there is an apparent invincibility about him that, by contrast, weakens the other characters, who are otherwise appealing. It was hard for me to pull for Zack, not because he was unlikeable, but because it doesn’t seem he needs anyone to pull for him.

In a scene on a lake with the Carla, the charming Canadian girl he falls in love with, he hesitates to swim, claiming he doesn’t know how. Aha, he’s not perfect, the reader thinks. But no, he then jumps into the water, fearlessly. Not even a hint of kryptonite for this Super-dude. A minor weakness such as an inability to swim could have provided a window to what has to be a lonesome and troubled soul inside. Though he masks it by a generous and charismatic exterior, Zack is driven by an every-man-for-himself philosophy that promotes lying to get jobs, doing and dealing drugs, and rationalizing other short cuts in life. Zack does experience personal growth in the novel and the events do make a deep impact on him. But I wasn’t convinced those impacts would be lasting.

What is lasting is the impression of Roppongi. There’s no denying this novel is an R-rated whirlwind that will likely prove great entertainment for people less pickier than me, the pro-Zacks (pun not intended) who probably make up the majority of the audience this author is trying to reach.

Synopsis:

Amidst the darkness of turmoil, there is hope.

Blake Solomon had never before heard such heart-wrenching stories until now. Jason gang member, Rebecca a child prostitute, Matthew an African refugee, and Felicity a reckless rich kid, make up the newest group at Blake’s Anchor Beach Rehabilitation Clinic.

Each have seen more than their share of tragedy and have reached a point of desperation where all hope seems lost. Leaving behind worlds tainted with drugs and alcohol, violence and abuse, self-harm, and street life is easier said than done. Unexpectedly, these four young lives collide in extraordinary circumstances as they attempt to salvage any glimmer of strength and self-belief they have left.

Blake’s battle to save all four from paths of certain self-destruction is the toughest he’s ever faced. Is a quick-fix all he has to offer before feeding them back to the lions? Or will he keep his promise to help them face their demons?

Review:

Somewhere during the tumultuous years we call being a teenager, I read a book called Voices that impacted me strongly at the time and stuck with me for many years. The concept of the book was the background and letters of teens who committed suicide, and was based on non-fiction cases. Each time I connected with the kid in the current “story” and each time my mind cried out for them to choose life — things would get better. When I ran across Ashley Sanders’ Facing Demons the write up reminded me of the book which had made such a huge impression on me. So I read the preview and decided to give it a try.

I was not disappointed.

Sanders has penned a powerful story weaving five troubled lives together in a beautiful setting. Blake Solomon rescues four teens from the hospital, transports them to his rehabilitation center, and helps them learn to take control of their own destiny and break their patterns from the past. And you may note that I mentioned five troubled lives, and not four. Blake has some troubles which are revealed through the course of the story as well, which help give him a realness he would not otherwise have had.

Each of the kids in the story come to life on the page, and you will feel like you could meet them somewhere in your own home town. Yet, each of them has a reason to want to die, as well as a reason to live — though they may not know it. While each of their stories has some similarities, they are unique to the character and the voices are well-developed. My only complaint, which probably comes from being a writer myself and therefore used to subjecting my own work to extreme critical analysis, is that despite the use of first person present tense (or in the case of Blake third person present tense), I felt distanced from the characters — like they were at arms length. I wanted to feel their pain, yet felt told about it instead. I am not a huge fan of present tense narrative, but the purpose behind it is to bring the reader into the mind of the character, reducing any distance. Toward the end of the book, the distance diminished, which made me wish the intimacy would have been there from the start.

However, despite my pickiness, Facing Demons is a worthwhile read, and one that teens will definitely connect to. The issues that the teens face have an incredible ring of truth about them. And in delving into Sanders’ background, I discovered that he works as a paramedic, so has seen this sort of thing first hand. What a wonderful way to take personal experience and convert it to an amazingly insightful tale. Facing Demons is about some of the poor choices we can make with our lives, or dealing with the circumstances dealt to us from the deck of life. It has a tremendous message of hope and will have you on the edge of your seat, biting your nails with its exciting conclusion. A definite “must read” for troubled teens, but good for all teens and those of us who still remember the emotional upheaval of those times.

Bravo, Mr. Sanders

What’s even better is that Sanders is currently working on the prequel stories of Jason, Rebecca, Matthew, and Felicity, and I for one can’t wait for them to be out.

Matadors
By Steve Bauman
Manicpressthrills
Copyright © 2012
230 pages
$14.99 at Amazon.com
$3.99 Kindle

Who is Michael Norton writing to and why is he so sensitive to the superficial identities of others, particularly those on Facebook? These questions drive the suspense in Matadors, a one-way epistolary mini-novel by Steve Bauman. Yet the underlying question for the un-cool but likeable protagonist is, where do I fit in this world?

Michael Norton’s emotionally moribund existence gets a jolt when he reunites with an old schoolmate from California, Blake “Bain” Bivins, who has come to Burlington, Vermont on business. Bain has always been larger-than-life and a womanizer whereas Michael has always been an introvert and clumsy with the opposite sex. When they were twenty, charismatic Bain was a source of amusement and even inspiration for Michael. But now, at age forty and corpulent, and moreover filled with an adult’s awareness of such things, Michael finds the gap, which has only widened with the years, disorientating.

As in olden days, Michael allows Bain to lead him out on a night on the town where the Californian befriends Michael’s locals almost instantly. Michael is somewhat turned off—read envious—at Bain’s success; the guy’s still got it. Bain is frustrated with Michael’s reticence and prods him to be more aggressive, which only exacerbates Michael’s tendency to compare how his actual self to how others appear, not surprisingly with unfavourable results.

His inability to ‘get it’ is captured nicely by his experience (and obsession) with Facebook.

Yet I joined Facebook and created a profile under my real name, with personal information that can be viewed by almost anyone. For a while, I felt like I was in control of the situation. I added an application that tracks the movies, music, and books I like, figuring that might allow me to connect with cool people. But it only served to remind me how much out of touch I am with the tastes of my so-called peers. Which I’m fine with, so long as I can reconcile my desire to stop judging others for their awful, awful tastes in everything with being able to easily see, every single day, their awful, awful tastes in everything.

Bain’s presence awkwardly illuminates Michael’s social withdrawal and penchant for taking the safe route. Bain truly becomes the bane of Michael’s existence. His presence instigates the emails (within which all these events with Bane are narrated) to an old love that make up this book. Her name has been X’ed out, which reveals a great deal too. As does the fact Michael doubts she even accesses this particular email account. It’s only within this relatively safe medium that Michael can let loose his self-expression, and possibly gain independence.

Such self-absorbed introspection often signals a dull, plot-less story. Yet Matadors entertains because Michael, through his often uncomfortably candid emails, is on a quest. A quest for his own identity and place in the world and the irony is that he’s not really aware of it. The smooth and unselfconscious writing from an often amusing and self-deprecating voice makes it easy to enjoy Matadors. The emails are generally short streams of self-consciousness and vary enough in mood and subject matter to not get tiresome, as we patiently wait to discover his relationship with the mysterious recipient.

I doubt Matadors could ever get published in the traditional world, which makes it a good example of the value of self-publishing. Unfortunately, the old bugaboos of sloppy proofreading are here too with the predominant culprit missing or transposed words. Fix that up and this story transforms into a fine specimen of independent storytelling and publishing.

Slotback Rhapsody
By Christopher Harris
CreateSpace
Copyright © 2011
266 pages
$12.00 at Amazon.com
$5.99 Kindle

Slotback Rhapsody by Christopher Harris is an intelligent football story not just for sports fans. Harris, who writes for ESPN.com, merges his football knowledge and writing craft to fine effect in this fictional yet insightful depiction of a struggling athlete and the choices he makes to achieve success.

It’s another training camp for determined but diminutive Nick Morrison who has had little success launching his professional football career. This time it’s with equally struggling Detroit—oddly, all team nicknames are conspicuously absent, perhaps for legal or copyright reasons—but he fails again. He’s in his late twenties now and the odds of succeeding are diminishing rapidly. Unless he loads the dice.

He remains in Detroit and strikes up a casual friendship with one of the team’s employees, Gasper, who becomes a connection for Nick to illegal Human Growth Hormone. What’s he got to lose? The stuff works and just in time as injuries create an opening for a slotback with Detroit. While his teammates and coaches notice he’s larger and faster, his intelligence, dogged hard work, and a bit of luck divert suspicion.

While hardly a Tim Tebow, Morrison’s success inspires his mediocre team and turns them into an unlikely playoff candidate. Furthermore, he becomes a fan favourite, a proletarian success story for a proletarian community. He’s easy for the Detroit fans to cheer for but not so much for the reader who knows his secret.

The season progresses and we’re along for the ride with Nick’s episodic observations and experiences on and off the field. Throughout, he remains even-keeled, enjoying but not flaunting his success, acknowledging but not feeling guilty about its cause. That makes Nick a worthy and reliable recorder of events but it also takes away from his impact as a protagonist.

His passivity and generally dour persona makes one question how or why people are drawn to him, other than to serve the story. We are not told his basic beliefs or values, let alone shown them, which makes it hard to relate to Nick. Early on he is shown to be kind, especially to dogs, but it’s not convincing. We really have no hope of knowing what his general motivation for life is, which is perhaps due to his rather detached worldview:

Relentlessness is the coin of this realm (football). To be on the team, you’re either an elite athlete even by professional standards, or you’re relentless. You pound on, the same way the days pound on. The general public, at a grocery store, in a movie theater, in traffic: they’re like phantoms to me now. Their incidental conversations are babble. They hint at lives that seem like secrets. I know I’m the one in the exclusive club, but they’re the ones who seem in on something. When I can see them. Sometimes they’re a blur. If ever by happenstance I run across a teammate away from the facility, I recognize that he feels it too. We are confused instruments at rest. And so finally I’m convinced that much of the world really is illusory. But what’s in this building, in these rooms and on these fields, and what’s waiting for us Sunday: that’s a reality I can’t get around. It’s coming. It’s coming so fast

He’s a gloomy guy by nature. It’s his teammates and coaches, his old girlfriends (particularly Henny), the underworld characters he encounters along the way that color his story. And for a subject matter riddled with cliches, these characters are not typecast. They are unique and interesting, more interesting than Nick in several cases. 

From a plotting standpoint, I felt things went a bit too easily for our underdog whose questionable choices never really carry a threat of significant, life-altering consequence. We see him in trouble but he never faces enough real danger or ultimate accountability to force out his true nature. His primary goal is to make the team, any team, and he does so within the first third of the book. After that, other than Nick’s hoping he doesn’t get caught using HGH, the drama is really more about the team and whether they’ll make the playoffs or not.

Nick’s passion is football and that part of him, the best part, does come out—often rhapsodically as implied by the title—in the frenetic and carefully crafted play-by-play passages and mini-essays about football. This is where the novel shines.

Football is beloved because there’s a scoreboard, because the rules are arcane but perfectly known to millions. Is there any wonder the slowest of slow-motion instant replay has evolved through football broadcasts, where we must know whether this shoe definitively touches the sideline marker or if the ball jiggles brownly in the wanton receiver’s mitts as he hits the turf? It is perfection because everything will be known. Anyone who says the sport is simply a venal substitute for warfare and that it satisfies the modern human’s suppressed bloodlust needs, they’ve either advanced to a higher stage of dealing with life’s unfathomability and should be followed like yogis, or are uncharitable to a fault. The beauty of statistics and formations and (yes, by heavens) instant replay is they let us touch bottom. And of course there is no bottom to life, which is wonderful but awful, and so we pretend: for a few hours, we allow ourselves to be charmed by a common spell. The first time one of my college games was televised—by some regional sports network with a two-camera setup and a tiny production truck—I DVR’d the broadcast and saw myself in instant replay, saw my body frozen in mid-lunge as the talking heads discussed whether the ball in my hands had broken the end zone’s plane. It was sublimity itself.

The creative use of language blends well with the football lingo. The latter can be cryptic and distracting but you don’t need to be a football expert to enjoy it. You do need expertise if you want to dissect every play call, but that’s not at all essential to the story. Indeed, non-fans might appreciate its atmosphere while gaining a decent overview of the football player’s world and a dramatized, albeit not in-depth, portrayal of issues such as HGH and gambling.

Slotback Rhapsody is more of an extended and dramatized report than an actual novel, but one that’s literary, informative, and bolstered by strong writing. Definitely a worthwhile read, and a satisfying one, but also one I think could have taken more risks.

Heaven Again
By H. C. Turk
Copyright © 2011
214 pages
$2.99 Kindle and Smashwords
$11.95 Multimedia CD-ROM (ISBN: 978-0963907073)

Grief and guilt ripple through Heaven Again by H. C. Turk, but not in a morose or self-pitying way. Despite emotionally weighed-down characters and tragic events, this compact, engaging novel that takes place in fictional locales in Florida compels the reader more to contemplation than anger, tears, or depression.

The opening is brutal but thankfully not graphically so, with Frank Hynek—Old enough to vote but too young to be president—sexually assaulting six-year-old Jeanine Alden. Her daddy’s voice on the radio—Glenn Alden is a popular local deejay—inspires her to resist, but then Frank accidentally kills her. He gives himself up yet claims innocence during his trial, attributing his actions to his own traumatic upbringing. This provokes Glenn Alden to attack his daughter’s killer right in the courtroom, exacting swift justice. In Glenn’s subsequent murder trial the jury finds him not guilty, to the righteous satisfaction of the town’s citizens.

Except for Frank’s outraged sister, Sarah Tolbert, who undertakes a campaign of harrassment at Janet Alden, Jeanine’s mother. Janet is alone now—she and Glenn having separated before Frank’s trial—and bears the blame in Sarah’s eyes for the death of her ‘innocent’ Frank. The police can or will do nothing about this harassment and Janet, already a wreck, deteriorates further. Her erratic moods and actions alienate her sister, friends, and co-workers. Meanwhile, Glenn has found anonymity a few hours drive away with the Gronshevs, an eccentric Eastern European immigrant family who are also mourning the recent loss of a child.

The grief and guilt Janet and Glenn experience independently, combined with a latent longing and need for each other, constantly interrupt the mundane activities of their altered lives. Not a day goes by in which a routine event will prompt a chilling, randomly timed thought about their lost child. Neither seeks help from anyone though. Janet spurns it whenever offered while Glenn, who has elected to mute his well-known voice, hides behind silence and dutiful attention to refurbishing trailers on the Gronshev farm. Only through Sarah’s vengeful actions do the two eventually find some kind of resolution. The plot is tight and tidy.

The writing is also tight and I never felt any scenes, except for one noted below, dragged. But it could be tidier. An over-reliance on sentences beginning with participial phrases became distracting for me. As was the use of negatives to add artificial profundity—Glenn shook his head in no direction that communicated a clear idea—or unsophisticated expressions such as—A hundred eyes looked to him. Also, the novel is sprinkled with abstract aphorisms that sometimes added a mystical element—Children and animals create beauty without grasping the term, mute to the expression of magnificent ideas—but at other times were too obscure to enhance the reading—Patrician ladies gasp when stricken by magnificence.

These points, along with the infrequent proofing mistakes, while worth noting, do not take away from the novel’s  strength, which is its handling of nearly all its characters. We aren’t asked to feel sorry for Janet and Glenn, or even Sarah, but we willingly empathize with them; their situations bring out sentiment without resorting to sentimentality. Their odd actions never strike the reader as implausible, yet still offer surprise. The omniscient voice ensures each  perspective, even Frank’s, is given a fair shake, leaving it up to the reader to work out any judgements.

One character stood out, the noble and enchanting Petra Gronshev, who added vibrant colour to a dark story:

Though hot for spring in Central Florida, this month would set no record. Though the temperature would reach the high eighties that day, there stood Petra in a long dress, almost formal in design, of brocaded linen with a subtle flower motif. In another living, Glenn had admired grown-up women who kept their hair long. Petra was a handsome lady with an elegant mien, her thick, greying hair ending at her shoulders. Glenn would not call her snooty, but her demeanor suggested giving orders instead of taking them. Pronouncing decrees perhaps.

Petra is a scene stealer. To the point she made lesser characters, such as Latona and Yount, pale to the point of irrelevance. The scene near the end in which Yount argues with Latona could have and should have been scrapped. Its incongruity to the rest threatened to ruin the entire book for me. Fortunately, the strength of what came before it, as well as a satisfying ending, ensured I came away with a positive reading experience overall.

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Tattered is the third novel in the heartwarming young adult series, Misfit McCabe. A little about the book:

What do Sunday afternoon court proceedings, cheerleader tryouts, and a book burning have in common? Katie McCabe is back in action.

After her nemesis Harvey is found guilty and sentenced to community service, Katie wants to believe her troubles are over, but Harvey won’t rest until he gets revenge. When blackmail rears its ugly head, she’s caught between friends and enemies putting her growing relationship with Tom at stake. Books go up in flames and Katie’s world rains down in tatters.

I know what you’re thinking… you’re thinking that I’m going to say that I got involved with LLBR through Twitter. Wrong. In August of 2008, Shannon Yarbrough, the founder of LLBR, reviewed Misfit McCabe, then by October I had come onboard as the second reviewer. I don’t get to review as many these days as I’d like to, but LLBR has grown and now has several people to help get the reviews out there. And it was LLBR who introduced me to Twitter (you knew I had to bring Twitter into it somehow). Now I’ll turn things over to Katie McCabe, the fourteen-year-old main character of Tattered.

Katie: Hi LLBR peeps! Thanks for having me today. Today I get to talk about two of my cousins, Uncle Charley’s sons, Matt and Mark. Matt is the oldest, then Mark, then Sarah, then Tim and me. Before I moved to town, I’d never met my cousins, or at least I didn’t think I had. When Matt picked me up at the bus stop I was floored. When he stepped on the bus and called my name it was like looking at an old picture of Daddy come to life. Tall, Blonde, and those clear blue eyes. In some ways it makes me feel better just to look at Matt, but then sometimes looking at him makes me miss Daddy more. Matt’s kinda quiet and he works hard. In fact, lately I hardly ever see him because he’s been working on building a house so when his girlfriend (who I haven’t met) comes back from her trip, he can propose to her.

Mark on the other hand, is noisy. He bursts through the door, his boots clomping on the floor. He has dark hair and eyes like Uncle Charley and a wickedly mischievous grin. Sarah warned me about how overprotective he can be, but I didn’t listen very well. She said that he won’t think any guy is good enough for me, so that’s one of the reasons I don’t talk about Tom being my boyfriend at home. Well, that and Uncle Charley won’t let me date. And Mark calls me Kit-Kat instead of Katie and has since the very first day after I arrived. It had something to do with the fit I threw during supper the first night…Mark thought it was funny. It was embarrassing.

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Street Raised
By Pearce Hansen
Copyright © 2006
ISBN: 978-0809556601
354 pages
$2.99 Kindle
$4.99 at Smashwords

Street Raised by Pearce Hansen is a basic revenge drama set in the grimly depicted environment of the East Bay area in California in the early 1980s. Oakland street hood, Speedy, gets released from a prison in the northern part of the state, shoeless. He ventures home, encountering a few adventures and picking up a kitten along the way. In a long opening chapter, we see the complex mix of violence and compassion that makes up the protagonist’s character. Once home, Speedy reunites with his younger brother, Willy, who’s become a crack addict during Speedy’s long incarceration.

Willy’s wretched descent prompts Speedy to enlist a friend, Fat Bob, who bounces at seedy bars, to liberate Willy from his addiction and squalid residence. The three then conspire to vanquish a gang of Mexicans who recently killed two other friends in brutal fashion. These Mexicans are sitting on a pile of money too, so there’s profit as well as revenge motivating this action. Stealing from criminals is essentially a victimless crime, or at least one that makes it easier for the reader to root for Speedy and his gang. Despite Speedy’s inherently criminal nature, he has a desire to get off the streets and live a conventional life, one in which he can take care of his kitten and Carmel, a woman he falls in love with. Other encounters with street characters inhibit his goal. Violence and tragedy ensues, much of it grisly, along with a deliciously graphic tour of Oakland.

The Oakland setting often steals the show but this is Speedy’s story. A nasty fellow portrayed heroically, larger than life. He almost instantly  attracts enmity and admiration from other characters, such as the creepy and underutilized Ghost, and his lover, Carmel. The unlikely quickness of these bonds could have worked had it not been for the novel’s slow pace. The sheer volume of back story and reflection of so many characters diluted the inherent and delightful viciousness of the story.

The pace also suffered from the frequency and irrelevancy of many authorial intrusions. An extreme example is when Speedy and Carmel are holed up in motel, trying to evade a gang chasing them. It’s a tense situation but for some reason the action is interrupted with several paragraphs describing what’s on television. The surprisingly high number of proofing errors puzzled me considering a much briefer version of this book was published over five years ago.

Street Raised was a frustrating read for me. It was just way too long. It’s unfortunate because there is entertainment value here, particularly the comprehensive and uncompromising depiction of Oakland, which was often surreally riveting, like a mural.

The apartment itself was a den of skinheads and bootwomen, at least a dozen lounging about  with beers and cigarettes in their hands. Butts and empty bottles and cans littered the floor; decks and longboards stood lined against the wall. The walls were festooned with flyers for punk shows, numberless out-of-date banners for past hardcore gigs around the Bay, for local bands like Fang and Urban Assault, Bad Posture or Flipper. There were holes punched in the walls, which were covered with graffiti, mainly three-legged swastikas, racist comments, spray painted obscenities and declarations such as ‘Bay Area Skinz Rule!’ A bootwoman with a lit cigarette dangling from her mouth was cooking food bank spaghetti at the kitchenette in the far back corner; an overflowing garbage can stood next to her.

The aura exuded by such passages is the book’s biggest strength, just as Oakland is its best character. I liked how the author didn’t hold back on the graphic violence, which was never gratuitous. Within Street Raised there is a gritty jewel of a novel that needs to come out, a rough diamond that needs a great deal of cutting and a significant amount of polishing to bring out its shine.

Remember those humiliating moments during childhood and adolescence when making a public mistake? Or when someone outside the family has been subjected to the dorkiness that is your parents? If so, you’ll have an idea of what it’s like to be Darla McKendrick, who is easily embarrassed by her father’s cliches and suffered a major humiliation because of a lie told to her by Aunt Didi when she first learned of an aunt she’d never met — Rebecca.

As Squalor, New Mexico opens, nine-year-old Darla overhears a conversation between her mother and Aunt Didi about her mysterious Aunt Rebecca, who they only discussed when they thought no one else was listening. This time what captured Darla’s attention was a word she didn’t understand because Aunt Didi described Rebecca as living in squalor, so just as all children do, Darla asked what squalor meant. As her mother hemmed and hawed, Aunt Didi jumped in to answer. “It’s a town in New Mexico, Darla. It’s an Indian name.” Darla had more questions about the tidbits she’d overheard, but the additional questions were squashed and she was sent to finish some homework. But, of course, Darla couldn’t let it go, so a couple weeks later, when having dinner with the Alexanders (Aunt Didi’s family) Darla questioned why they couldn’t visit Aunt Rebecca, and Uncle George took on the answer.

       ”Darla, listen to me,” Uncle George barked. “We don’t see your aunt Rebecca because, well, as your aunt Didi says, she lives in Squalor, and knowing Rebecca, you can be damn sure there’s no way she’ll ever get out. That’s it now!”
       ”She could screw her way out!” I said helpfully.

Which of course caused a family uproar as Darla had only repeated the words Aunt Didi said. And for awhile, that was it, even though Darla didn’t forget about the mysterious aunt who seemed to make her parents edgy every time her name was mentioned. That is until Darla was in the seventh grade, and her enemy Amy Ludwig, whom Darla referred to as Lughead, smugly answered the question of what cities were in New Mexico, but Darla knew she could top her. “I have an aunt who lives in Squalor!” I said proudly, looking right into the Lughead’s eyes. Darla was mortified when she found out that, as her teacher put it, “…you’ll find squalor in the dictionary, not on the map.”

Lisette Brodey takes us on a journey into a family where secrets abound and cause untold pain as Darla is growing up because there are so many things which are kept a secret and she feels she is being blamed for Rebecca’s mistakes instead of her own. And no matter how hard she tries, she can’t seem to get away from the shadow that Rebecca still cast in their lives — even when no one had heard from her or seen her since before Darla was born. Ultimately, Darla and her three cousins, April, May, and June try to piece together the past to help unlock the present.

I’ll be honest, when I saw the number of pages listed for the book, my eyes opened a bit as it would be on the long side for a young adult novel. I do know that the novel originally was not intended as a young adult, but does fit in the young adult mold, although can be enjoyed by all ages from young adult on up. So, in a way, I’m glad I read the book on my Kindle because with a Kindle you simply keep on turning the pages, and there isn’t the physical reminder of the size of the book (unless you watch the little scroll bar at the bottom). This enabled me to read for the pleasure of it, and I found the story kept pulling me along to the point where I didn’t want to stop reading. I wanted to find out exactly what happened in the past and why they allowed the past to cast such a long and all-encompassing shadow over their lives.

Brodey does a masterful job of putting us in the mind of Darla McKendrick and we feel her pain as she is growing and maturing into a young woman. Throughout the book are wonderful characters to meet, such as the detestable Uncle Martin and his latest floozy, Maude. By the time you’re done reading Squalor, New Mexico, you’ll feel as if you are a member of the McKendrick’s extended family, who for all their flaws, really do love one another. Definitely a book to check out.